Monday, April 21, 2008

Surreality

A dark shadow crossed his mind, a cloud of turbulent ideas. They shifted with unease, disturbed by light and wind, brooding as they formed strange shapes, as if uncertain of what to do. A flash of lightning and they decided to precipitate. Cascading drops of happiness fell to the grassy plain, which began sprouting musings and emotions as the earth does flowers in spring.

But then it changed. The rain boiled and reddened, forming rivers of horrible, poisonous blood frothing with despair and pain.

Poetic way to look at it, really. The rush, the ecstasy, the freedom. And then the pain, the fear, the misery and self-disgust. His eyes opened, and after a while he began to see.

From his place amongst the garbage cans, the smell of which he was now immune to, he watched as people walked by. People; the grotesque, the masses, the world. The drab greys, the depressing colours, the silly, fruitless exploits of their lives. Walking ashes, soon to be dust.

(to be continued)

1 comments:

sabizak said...

I like the way you personify and give concrete shape to essentially abstract things like thoughts and feelings, as in

'...a cloud of turbulent ideas. They shifted with unease, disturbed by light and wind, brooding as they formed strange shapes, as if uncertain of what to do'

or

'The scene rippled slightly under his breath'

I wish this latter image could be used to depict the narrator's feelings in real life, not necessarily a dream.

Btw, horrible is a very nondescript word, especially amongst others that arouse far more passion and feeling.